/ is this poetry? /

Vision: To me, vision is what the poet sees with their heart and what they in turn make the reader feel. The first line of the poem immediately made me envision someone gasping at some horrible thing that just happened, and you kept me envisioning this throughout. This said, I would have loved more of that fantastic word art. You began it in the first stanza and picked it up in the end, but the middle verse seemed almost surgically implanted; it didn't quite feel the same.

Originality: I saw a personal angle of a very popular subject here. Grief, chaos, pain, all the things I get out of this poem are basically poetry staples, so Originality won't score high.

Technique: The words shards, shatter and break are emphasized by the choppy layout created by how you timed the line breaks. The lack of capitalization and punctuation also add to the raw effect. One line bugs me though. "your tears are valid" confuses me. Yes I know what it means, but I think a better word picture or even word choice would have given it more of an impact, which leads us to...

Impact: Your opening line was an attention grabber, enough so that this poem will stay with me for a long time. That was the honey, now here's the hatchet. A previous commented said that the poem felt incomplete. I agree. Sometimes a cliff hanger or an open ending can be a good thing; leave the reader thinking about what they just read. This is not the case here. I feel as though I am left with an unfinished story without knowing what is going on. Again, some mystery is good, especially in a poem of this tone, but there's just not quite enough here for that to work well.

Overall I like it, though. Something about this poem sticks out to me and it will have home in my faves.